The First Night

World of Make Belief 1 Minute

My fingers clutched at his dark, curly wisps of hair, my eyes closed in a hypnotic trance, my lips pursed together. I lay there, silently, with him mounted on top of me. Occasionally, I will myself to let out a seductive moan of encouragement.

Not that he needed any. He was in the throes of pleasure – riding me, grabbing me, pounding into me. His weight crushing my ribs, his mouth ravaging mine like a savage animal tearing through its prey. His smoky breath assaulted my nostrils, making it difficult to breathe. He bit into my right nipple as he pinched the other one making me writhe in pain. A single tear made its way out of one eye and rolled off my cheek. I led him into believing I was enjoying it. The sooner he climaxes the sooner this finishes, I thought!

He thrust back and forth, and continued to lunge, grunting and moaning as pleasure racked his body. Shortly after, I felt him go limp and then roll off of me. Gasping with pain and relief, I propped myself up searching for the clothes he had earlier ripped off of me and tossed aside. I lifted myself up and walked over to pick up my half-torn shirt.

Wiping my tears, I gathered my clothes and did my hair, pretending nothing had happened.

Casually, I picked up the money he had left for me on the bedside table and made a call to my agent.

Published by Piyusha Vir

Writer, Blogger, Trainer, and Author of Just Another Day (amzn.in/hOIaKxf) and Dashavatar-Stories of Lord Vishnu (https://www.amazon.in/Dashavatar-Stories-Vishnu-Piyusha-Vir/dp/9385854860), published by Readomania.

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36 thoughts on “The First Night”

  1. Time for that woman to get a different job. Great story, great twist, and great insight into reality. That man would not want to fuck me. I would get him right back. I would teach his ass a few things.

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    1. Pity she didn’t have you teaching her a few things. 😀 Thanks so much! 🙂 🙂

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  3. My goodness, that was intense. You’ve done a great job with this. The use of a lot of descriptive words, visual as well as audial, is good. Made me feel her misery and think it’s real.

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    1. Thank you, Sonali! I’m glad it had the desired effect. That’s really encouraging, especially coming from an amazing story teller as you 🙂

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  9. The title and the first line – I was anticipating a sexy erotic little snippet.
    Next couple of lines – I thought it’s an abusive husband/ marital rape.
    Nothing prepared me for the end.
    Dude you killed it! I actually cringed, I felt so bad for the woman 😦 Awesome piece of work..

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    1. YIPPEEEEEE!!!!!!!! Thank you, Ms. Sassy. Appreciate the detailed feedback. That’s exactly the effect I wanted. So thrilled it came across exactly like that. Thank you! Thank you!

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  12. Oh my goodness, little sister! What a painful subject to adddress! Very well done. You painted a very clear, albeit heartbreaking picture of what was happening to your character. Great writing, difficult writing!

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    1. Thank you so much. That’s so encouraging. Eagerly await your feedback on the previously published works. 😉 Headed your way now 🙂

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    3. I’m reading that bit now. CoT looks interesting. All the best for your books. I’m in the middle of my first WIP. Have graduated from thinking about writing to actually writing. 😀

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    4. Thank you 🙂 I need to get back into writing. I’ve been plotting out my stories and now I have to actually write again lol COT is interesting if you want to read a merman romance 🙂 Thanks for checking out my blog.

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  14. Powerful story and as a woman, I felt disturbed. I could relate to the beginning in someways. But your lines at the end are the twist. She is getting paid to have this done to her. Makes me sad, anywhere any other time we’d call it rape.

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    1. Exactly! I was so nervous posting this, Mandi. Am so glad it had the desired effect. Thank you so much. Means a lot.

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