Rain Dance

Nov 18, 2015 | World of Make Belief

 

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Flash Fiction for 40th Challenge for Aspiring Writers Week of November 17, 2015 Photo Prompt by Sonya with the blog, Only 100 Words

“No rain today either”, remarked Jack, his brow furrowed as he looked out the window at the blazing sun and the clear blue sky.

“It has to rain soon. Else…”, said Alicia, anxiously.

“Yes, just has to…”, thought Jack, “Everything depends on it”. He thought of their withering crops and sick animals. The heat wave had been too much for them to bear.

He walked over to the barn to check on the animals. He refilled their water containers again, just as he had done so an hour ago. The heat was making them excessively thirsty. He splashed water all over the barn to keep it cool. Just then he noticed that the some of the animals had escaped their enclosures. The heat must have made them restless, he thought anxiously, as he locked up the rest in their respective enclosures and stepped out to look for the missing ones.

Just then he saw White Gold and Blue Star – their two peacocks out in the field; preening and dancing, as dark clouds rolled in.


@175 Words

A story for 40th Challenge for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. To read more click HERE

Piyusha Vir

Piyusha Vir

Piyusha Vir is a writer, artist, a CELTA-certified English Language trainer, and a Creative Writing Coach. About me

18 Comments

  1. Priceless Joy

    Ahh, the peacocks are doing a rain dance and it’s working! Great story! I thought it was well told. Thank you for participating in the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge. 🙂

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    • Wandering Soul

      Thank you for coming up with such a great platform for us. I am so relieved about the positive response. I’m not used to writing such short pieces. Went out of my comfort zone for this one. Was nervous and apprehensive when posting it, so your feedback is very reassuring. Thank you so much. 🙂

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      • Priceless Joy

        You’re welcome and believe me, it is my pleasure! You will get hooked on flash fiction. It is fun and addicting! Of course, all of us came out of our comfort zones to participate and now we are hooked! LOL!

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  2. WanderLaur

    I love it! Well written with a great ending. Dancing in the rain is a wonderful action and metaphor. I also have to comment that every time I go to your blog, I smile (and chuckle a little) when I see your tagline.

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    • Wandering Soul

      Thank you. I am glad it makes you smile. We all need those in our hectic lives, don’t we. Your support keeps me going.

      Reply
  3. camerapentravel

    I love dancing in the rain. Well written. I wonder if I could produce one hundred words to suit a photograph so aptly.

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    • Wandering Soul

      At first, I didn’t think so either, but then decided to go in for it. Give it a try atleast! 🙂

      Reply
  4. Ahmed

    Very nice post 🙂

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  5. mandibelle16

    There must be a bit of folklore about peacocks and rain. Good job.

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    • Wandering Soul

      Yes. Just before it rains, the peacocks spread their plume to its full width and dance. This is to attract the female peahens. It’s a beautiful but rare sight to see a peacock dance in real life. 🙂 Thank you for reading and for your liking it 🙂

      Reply
  6. Laura Thiessen

    It must be quite a sight to see peacocks dancing in the rain.

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  7. Vibrant

    I loved reading it. 🙂

    Thanks for sharing!

    Love and light <3

    Anand 🙂

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  8. iamabloggertoo

    Wow ! Another cute short story about the Rain and Peacock…It’s always amazing to see peacocks dance 🙂

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      • iamabloggertoo

        Stories like these will inspire newbie bloggers like me to write more i guess 🙂

        Reply
        • Wandering Soul

          I am a newbie myself! Let’s learn and grow together 🙂

          Reply

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