05 May The First Night
My fingers clutched at his dark, curly wisps of hair, my eyes closed in a hypnotic trance, my lips pursed together. I lay there, silently, with him mounted on top of me. Occasionally, I will myself to let out a seductive moan of encouragement.
Not that he needed any. He was in the throes of pleasure – riding me, grabbing me, pounding into me. His weight crushing my ribs, his mouth ravaging mine like a savage animal tearing through its prey. His smoky breath assaulted my nostrils, making it difficult to breathe. He bit into my right nipple as he pinched the other one making me writhe in pain. A single tear made its way out of one eye and rolled off my cheek. I led him into believing I was enjoying it. The sooner he climaxes the sooner this finishes, I thought!
He thrust back and forth, and continued to lunge, grunting and moaning as pleasure racked his body. Shortly after, I felt him go limp and then roll off of me. Gasping with pain and relief, I propped myself up searching for the clothes he had earlier ripped off of me and tossed aside. I lifted myself up and walked over to pick up my half-torn shirt.
Wiping my tears, I gathered my clothes and did my hair, pretending nothing had happened.
Casually, I picked up the money he had left for me on the bedside table and made a call to my agent.
dvaalPosted at 16:50h, 05 May
Powerful picture you’ve created. Painful to read.
mandibelle16Posted at 17:08h, 05 May
Powerful story and as a woman, I felt disturbed. I could relate to the beginning in someways. But your lines at the end are the twist. She is getting paid to have this done to her. Makes me sad, anywhere any other time we’d call it rape.
Wandering SoulPosted at 17:10h, 05 May
Exactly! I was so nervous posting this, Mandi. Am so glad it had the desired effect. Thank you so much. Means a lot.
AkaluvPosted at 17:23h, 05 May
I liked your descriptions and the emotions here. It was really good. I’m looking forward to reading your other works.
Wandering SoulPosted at 17:31h, 05 May
Thank you so much. That’s so encouraging. Eagerly await your feedback on the previously published works. 😉 Headed your way now 🙂
AkaluvPosted at 17:35h, 05 May
You are very welcome! I’m currently in the process of writing two books, so I love reading stories.
Wandering SoulPosted at 17:37h, 05 May
I’m reading that bit now. CoT looks interesting. All the best for your books. I’m in the middle of my first WIP. Have graduated from thinking about writing to actually writing. 😀
AkaluvPosted at 17:46h, 05 May
Thank you 🙂 I need to get back into writing. I’ve been plotting out my stories and now I have to actually write again lol COT is interesting if you want to read a merman romance 🙂 Thanks for checking out my blog.
Dr Meg SorickPosted at 17:37h, 05 May
Oh my goodness, little sister! What a painful subject to adddress! Very well done. You painted a very clear, albeit heartbreaking picture of what was happening to your character. Great writing, difficult writing!
Wandering SoulPosted at 17:45h, 05 May
Thank you, elder sister. 🙂 So thrilled at that comment. 🙂
Dr Meg SorickPosted at 17:55h, 05 May
You are welcome!
MindandLifeMattersPosted at 20:26h, 05 May
Powerful description, the twist at the end was mind blowing! Kudos to you for writing this very difficult subject and writing it so well! 🙂
Wandering SoulPosted at 03:40h, 06 May
Thank you! For your help in making it better too . 🙂
MindandLifeMattersPosted at 03:47h, 06 May
Nahhhh, no thank you between sisters….! You are a good writer! 🙂
timelesswheelPosted at 08:51h, 06 May
Heart-wrenching. You are a good story teller.
Wandering SoulPosted at 07:11h, 07 May
Thank you 🙂
sassandsaucePosted at 11:01h, 06 May
The title and the first line – I was anticipating a sexy erotic little snippet.
Next couple of lines – I thought it’s an abusive husband/ marital rape.
Nothing prepared me for the end.
Dude you killed it! I actually cringed, I felt so bad for the woman 🙁 Awesome piece of work..
Wandering SoulPosted at 11:04h, 06 May
YIPPEEEEEE!!!!!!!! Thank you, Ms. Sassy. Appreciate the detailed feedback. That’s exactly the effect I wanted. So thrilled it came across exactly like that. Thank you! Thank you!
sassandsaucePosted at 11:05h, 06 May
Now you better write something happy to cheer me up!
Wandering SoulPosted at 11:07h, 06 May
😀 Soon, I Promise 🙂
Sonali MukherjeePosted at 14:34h, 06 May
The picture was so vivid and heartbreaking. My heart goes out to the poor woman who is violated just for the scraps of fancy paper that seem to run our world.
Wandering SoulPosted at 14:40h, 06 May
Thank you, Sonali! I’m glad it had the desired effect. That’s really encouraging, especially coming from an amazing story teller as you 🙂
Clueless BirdiePosted at 17:40h, 06 May
It is so discriptive , I can imagine each word . Powerful but sad. Very well written Piyusha 😀
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Ruchi Singh (@RuchiWriter)Posted at 06:34h, 07 May
Beautifully written. Invoked the right emotions – grief and pity
Wandering SoulPosted at 07:08h, 07 May
Thank you so much. Also, for commenting and for visiting, Ruchi!
stuartakenPosted at 07:08h, 07 May
Cleverly constructed to arouse empathy and produce shock for the reader. This is good writing. Keep at it; talent like this should be nurtured.
Wandering SoulPosted at 07:10h, 07 May
Thank you so much, Sir! Really appreciate your visit and feedback. 🙂
xaranaharaPosted at 18:41h, 14 May
Agreed. She writes better than most Americans, that’s for sure.
Wandering SoulPosted at 18:46h, 14 May
hahaha! Thank you, that’s a big big BIG compliment for an Indian!
devikafernandoPosted at 07:40h, 07 May
My goodness, that was intense. You’ve done a great job with this. The use of a lot of descriptive words, visual as well as audial, is good. Made me feel her misery and think it’s real.
Wandering SoulPosted at 07:57h, 07 May
Thank you, Devika 🙂 Your comment made my day. 🙂
AnandPosted at 07:45h, 09 May
You paint powerful pictures with your words, Piyusha. It was a moving story.
Wandering SoulPosted at 08:56h, 09 May
Thank you, Anand! 🙂
xaranaharaPosted at 18:40h, 14 May
Time for that woman to get a different job. Great story, great twist, and great insight into reality. That man would not want to fuck me. I would get him right back. I would teach his ass a few things.
Wandering SoulPosted at 18:48h, 14 May
Pity she didn’t have you teaching her a few things. 😀 Thanks so much! 🙂 🙂