22 Sep A 100 Words Micro Fiction
Here I am sharing a short story I wrote long back, in response to a prompt given by Short Story Lovers’ Facebook Page. I had even forgotten about it. Only now when it came up on my notifications recently, because someone clicked ‘like’ on it, did I remember that I had written it quite some time ago.
The prompt was
He held her hand and gently caressed it. Just like he always had for the past fifty years. Only now she didn’t reciprocate. Only now her eyes didn’t gaze back into his. Only now she didn’t giggle or blush like she had every time. Someone stepped forward and gently pulled him away even as they fought back their own tears. It was their lovely daughter.
He looked up at the young girl and was reminded of her – the one who refused to even look at him now. He sighed, wiped his tears away and stepped back.
A few moments later, the casket was closed and lowered into the ground.
Did you like the story? How would you have written the story further? Do share your comments and feedback via the comment box below.
MindandLifeMattersPosted at 12:26h, 22 September
Beautiful story! I really liked this one!
mitadaurPosted at 13:57h, 22 September
Nice story Piyusha.
Wandering SoulPosted at 16:58h, 22 September
Thank you so much! Glad you liked it 🙂
mandibelle16Posted at 19:03h, 25 September
Well written, so sad!
Wandering SoulPosted at 04:25h, 26 September
Thank you, Mandi!
Keiths RamblingsPosted at 09:56h, 26 September
So sad yet so beautiful.
Wandering SoulPosted at 10:05h, 26 September
Thank you so much, Keith! Appreciate your kind words.
A wallflowerPosted at 10:48h, 20 April
I loved your version. I have just started blogging. I like your blogs. I am still learning ☺️
Wandering SoulPosted at 13:09h, 05 May
Thank you soo much! That means a lot to me. 🙂
NehaPosted at 16:21h, 09 September
That was beautiful. I love such tales of companionship and love. It gives a sense of stability and beauty to the words ‘together forever’
Wandering SoulPosted at 18:29h, 09 September
Indeed. That was the purpose behind the story. Being a die-hard romantic, I love tales of forever love. 🙂 So glad you liked it.
Rohan Kachalia (@rohank01)Posted at 11:07h, 10 September
A nice micro fiction, Piyusha. You brought out the emotions very well.
Wandering SoulPosted at 11:40h, 10 September
Thank you so much! 🙂
Apeksha SolankiPosted at 23:20h, 10 September
Wandering SoulPosted at 07:59h, 11 September
🙂 Thank you! Can’t wait to see what you would come up with. 🙂
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